Setting the Stage: Active vs Passive
I began class with a simple question: would you rather watch Lebron James play basketball or some fat slob in row C eat popcorn? Other than the two unintelligent Kobe Bryant fans, the class shouted, "Lebron James! He’s the best! Who wants to watch some fat guy eat popcorn?"
My eyes enlarged and I shot fire out of them: one flame for each student. The classroom burned as I unleashed my demoniacal revenge for being peppered with essays full of passive sentences, the writing equivalent of the popcorn eater in the third row, when I could have been reading essays with active voice, the writing equivalent of Lebron James.
If I ever teach again, I’m going to explain the difference between active and passive voice before my students write their essays and I turn them into ashes with fiery darts.
Just in case you’re interested in hiring a writing teacher, here’s what I came up with:
Understanding Active vs. Passive Voice
Active voice is the voice used to indicate that the subject of the sentence is performing the action or causing the action. Passive voice is the voice used when the subject is the recipient of the action. Strong writing uses active voice. Passive voice should only be used in the following instances:
- When intentionally hiding the subject of the sentence. For example, a politician might say, "Mistakes were made."
- When intentionally truing to minimize the guilt of the subject. For example, a cheating husband might respond, "Adultery was committed by me."
- When passive voice better emphasizes the main point of the passage. For example, Children were harmed by unlicensed bus drivers.
Active vs. Passive Voice in Student Writing
Knowing when to use active and passive voice does not mean students will use it correctly. Show them. Instruct them to copy the following in their notebooks. If they still don’t improve their use of passive and active voice, have them make phylacteries.
- If the subject receives the action or is not doing the action, the voice is passive.
- Passive voice is usually wordier.
- If the subject performs the action, the voice is active.
- Active voice is preferred because it is direct and concise.
- Active voice is the equivalent of watching Lebron James.
- Passive voice is the equivalent of watching corn grow.
- Active voice creates interest.
- Passive voice creates boredom, world hunger, and depletes the ozone layer (OK, I made the last two up).
- Passive voice contains a lot of to be verbs.
- Instruct students to copy in their notebooks the differences between passive and active voice. Provide examples.
- If revising an essay, pair students.
- Instruct them to read their rough drafts and circle passive voice constructions.
- Instruct each pair to exchange rough drafts and identify passive voice constructions in their partner’s writing.
- Rewrite paragraphs in active voice.
- Share revisions with the class.
- Motivate students with a paragraph challenge.
- Click on the Using Strong Verbs lesson or Eliminate To Be Verbs lesson at the bottom of this article for suggestions.
- If these suggestions don’t work, try my shooting flames from your eyes trick explained above and imagine LeBron James in the NBA Finals.
This lesson was inspired by Lebron James and Mini Lessons for Revision by Susan Geye, 1997, Absey & Co. Spring, TX.
For a complete semester standards based curriculum guide, follow the link.
This post is part of the series: Better Grammar Equals Better Writing
- Teaching Students How to Combine Sentences and Improve their Writing
- Lesson Plan: Eliminate Weak Verb-Adverb Combinations
- Lesson Plan: Eliminate "To Be" Verbs
- Lesson Plan: Write With Strong Verbs
- Lesson Plan: Active Voice vs. Passive Voice
- Revising Pronouns and Antecedents with this Lesson Plan
- Pronoun-Antecedent Agreement Made Easy
- Lesson Plan: Understanding Independent and Dependent Clauses
- Teach Your Kids to Eliminate Fragments and Run-ons in Their Writing
- Lesson Plan: Use Parts of Speech to Improve Sentence Beginnings