Tips for Writing Strong, Effective Sentences: Improve Revision With These Tips

Tips for Writing Strong, Effective Sentences: Improve Revision With These Tips
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Redirected Frustration

I felt great. I had just taught an amazing lesson on the importance of writing strong sentences. Students gave me high-fives as they

walked out the door. Finally, they would be writing effective sentences in their essays.

But when they turned in their assignments, my joy turned to horror as I read the same drivel that had haunted my existence for years. “What did I do wrong?” I cried, as stunned students snickered at my incredulity. Seconds before peppering the class with double-edged sharpened pencils, I had an idea: maybe I should come up with a lesson on writing strong sentences and teach them how to actually do it instead of just telling them how important it is. I put the pencil sharpener away, called my wife, and told her I’d be home late.

I had work to do. I had to create a lesson plan for writing effective sentences. Here’s what I came up with:

Techniques for Improving Sentences

Improve those monotonous essays with these techniques:

  1. Add an infinitive phrase:

Before: All I wanted to do was improve my score in timed writing and getting those improved scores became very important to me.

After: To improve my timed writing score I should practice timed writing.

  1. Use a subordinating conjunction to combine sentences:

Before: I thought I did excellent on my timed writing test. My grade was much lower than I thought.

After: I thought I did excellent on my timed writing test until I saw my grade.

  1. Change a statement to a question in quotes:

Before: My friend and I thought about abandoning our friend as the bear attacked.

After: I turned to Bill and asked, “Should we warn Terrance or just go?"

  1. Add a present participial phrase (that’s a phrase beginning with a word that ends in ‘ing’).

Before: We ran faster than we had ever run before as the big bear ripped out Terrance’s guts with its paw.

After: Looking on in dismay as the bear ripped out Terrance’s guts, we awoke from our startled state and ran.

  1. Join two sentences with a comma and a coordinating conjunction (and, but, for, nor, yet, so) and create a compound sentence.

Before: We knew we didn’t have to outrun the bear. We had to run a little bit faster than Terrance.

After: We knew we didn’t have to outrun the bear**, but** we did have to outrun Terrance.

  1. Add dialogue:

Before: We told Terrance to get out of the tent and run.

After: I yelled, “Terrance, there’s a grizzly bear outside the tent! Run!"

  1. Start with an ly word:

Before: I was sad when I saw Terrance’s body strewn across the mountain.

After: Sadly, we looked at Terrance’s mangled body.

  1. Start the sentence with a prepositional phrase:

Before: I ran really fast the moment I saw Terrance’s arm torn off and thrown across the campsite.

After: At that moment, I ran faster than I’d ever run.

* This lesson was inspired by Mini Lessons for Revision by Susan Geye, 1997, Absey & Co. Spring, TX.

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