- Have students read their rough draft or one of their previous essays.
- Instruct them to highlight each topic sentence.
- Identify which characteristics each topic sentence contains.
- Revise topic sentence.
- I find it best to practice some together first. You can come up with your own or steal mine:
1) Original: Columbus was an explorer in the 1400s.
Revision: Travel has changed since the days of Columbus.
2) Original: People waste time
Revision: Some pass time moving from one incomplete task to another, spending too little time with loved ones, investing too little time in physical and mental self-improvement, and treading water financially.
3) Original: I don't like diapers even though I love my children.
Revision: I love my children, but I hate changing their poopy diapers (especially when my dog runs off with it), but there's one diaper I didn't mind changing; ironically, it was the most difficult diaper-change ever, requiring 17 wipes and a blow torch.
4) Original: I had a very bright student long ago.
Revision: Even linguistically gifted geniuses struggle with self esteem.